2022年深圳中考英语作文快评新鲜出炉啦!附参考范文
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2022年深圳中考英语作文评析
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2022年深圳中考英语作文(学生回忆版)
IV. 书面表达(15分)
青春飞扬vlog:李华参加海边活动,介绍录制的vlog,主要活动包括
沙滩排球、冲浪、晚上搭帐篷聚餐、收拾垃圾、开分享会。说说活动感悟。
审题
1. 确定文体:详细描述早中晚的活动,最后总结感悟,可选择记叙文文体。
2. 确定时态和人称:后期vlog写解说词,时态可选择:一般过去时、一般现在时、现在进行时。
解说词可选用第一人称(I、We)或者第三人称视角(Students)
3. 列提纲:提示要点和对应的关键词句先翻译下来(surfing、tents、beach volleyball、sharing meeting等等)
4. 组织语言(草稿):可采用总分总的写作结构:
总(去海边游玩的事实)---分(具体的海边活动)---总(活动的感想)
先翻译材料,带入自己的角度,使得文章有场景感;再加入自己的感想,中考毕业vlog可以用一些感叹句表达心情
5. 润饰:替换高级词汇、高级句型和短语、结尾升华主题
6. 检查错误:包括单词拼写人称、时态、主谓一致、大小写、标点符号等细节问题
7. 誊抄作文:注意书写整洁、字体规范
解题思路
1.激活相关词汇。比如at the seaside/ on the coast (在海边)、playvolleyball on the beach (在沙滩打排球)、gosurfing (冲浪)、put up a (tent)(搭帐篷)、havea get-together(聚餐)、collectthe rubbish (收集垃圾)、sharingsession (分享会)
2. 确定时态。因为是在解说 vlog中正在展示的画面,所以用一般过去时,一般现在时,进行时,将来时都可以。
3. 整合信息。写作主要包括活动的内容和活动感悟。需要注意以下几点:(1) 注意句子和句子之前的衔接,多用衔接词,使文章更加连贯、逻辑更清晰。比如: Firstly,.... Secondly,.... Thirdly,....; Some are...., while others are....(2)句子结构完整
4. 适当增加內容:庆祝毕业、毕业寄语,如:I hope you are happy and healthy forever./ I hope you are successful in the future./ I hope we will keep in touch with others./ I hope you will enjoy your new life...
参考范文
范文提供:蓝天一对一英语教师赖焱老师
How time flies,welcome to our graduation ceremony!In order to relax ourselves, we took part in an unforgettable activity at the beach. Now, let’s enjoy!
First of all, an exciting beach volleyball competition is on show, let’s guess which team will be the champion, boys or girls?
Follow me and let’s go ahead. Look, how huge the waves are! The students are fighting with the waves like warriors.
Night falls, it’s time to have dinner, some students are setting up tents while others arecollecting rubbish. At last, during the sharing meeting, every student expresses the happiness and sadness of parting freely.
From what has been experienced, I believe all of us will have a better future. Wherever we are, we will never forget the time which witnesses our valuable friendship.
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