8月28日雅思大作文真题 | 外教原创高分范文+解析+朗读:间隔年的优劣势

发布于 2021-08-30 12:21 ，所属分类：试题库考试资料大全




大家好！


我是来自加拿大的雅思外教Mac


今天，我们来看8月28日的雅思大作文真题


真题解析、原创高分范文


范文朗读、范文解析




上题：


Some school leavers travel or work for a period of time instead of going directly to university.

What are the advantages and disadvantages for their studies?


**粗体和下划线是我自己标注的，目的是在下文教大家怎么飞快改写这个question statement。


-- 题目分析--



Type: Report 报告类


  • Body 1: helps mature and focus students, more experience帮助学生成长、成熟，积累更多人生经验

  • Body 2: may begin to prefer freedom from study, enjoy working and the money resulting in becoming distracted from study, a wish to finish study earlier than expected 可能会导致学生“爱自由”多于“爱学习”，享受工作及工作带来的经济上的收入，结果：不继续学业







- Model Answer 高分范文 & 范文朗读-


范文音频戳这里





-- EssayAnalysis范文解析 --


-- (1) Introduction --



Paraphrasing from the Statement/Question:

  • School leavers = high school graduates (因为题目里提到了"instead of going directly to unversity"，所以我用了high school graduates来替换"school leavers")
  • travel = go traveling
  • work = seek employment找工作
  • for a period of time = take a gap year
  • instead of = rather than 而不是
  • going directly to = immediately entering
  • university = higher education高等教育

*大家可以平时积累高频词汇的同义词或近义词，这样就可以做到在考场上信手拈来，节约宝贵的思考时间。

Standard Phrase for the “Report” type essay:

  • This essay shall explore both the benefits and drawbacks…这篇文章将会探索……的优劣势

Words showing Cohesion (C&C):
  • Rather than
  • This
  • if
  • they

Vocabulary:
  • a gap year 间隔年；空档年
  • pursue having追求拥有……


-- (2) Body 1--


Aspects that must be referred to:
• What are the advantages for their studies?
主体段1讲间隔年的优势



Standard IELTS essay phrase:
  • One of the main benefits of … is 最主要的一个优势是……

Vocabulary and Collocations:
  • matriculating into 录取；注册
  • chosen field of study 选择的专业领域
  • potential 潜在的
  • foundation of ……的基础
  • practicality 实用性；实践性
  • apt 善于
  • overcoming problems克服问题
  • disciplined 自律

Words Showing Cohesion [Signposting words, conjunctions, relative pronouns] (C&C)
  • This
  • Particularly
  • one
  • who
  • , especially if
  • within
  • Even though
  • , it
  • , and this
  • can only benefit
  • Likewise,
  • become more
  • , teaching
  • , a
  • more


-- (3) Body 2--


Aspects that must be referred to:

• What are the disadvantages for their studies?

主体段2讲间隔年的劣势



Standard IELTS essay phrase:

  • On the other hand,… 从另一方面来说

Vocabulary and Collocations:
  • time off 休息；休假
  • apply (focus) 专心；努力
  • may become addicted to 可能会沉迷于
  • may constantly yearn可能会持续渴望
  • ‘on the road’“在路上”
  • disincentivized 抑制；阻碍；不愿意
  • the rewards of……的回报/酬劳
  • independent income 独立收入
  • to return to the workforce 返回职场；回到工作中

Words Showing Cohesion [Signposting words, conjunctions, relative pronouns] (C&C)
  • On the other hand,
  • , taking
  • may result in
  • becoming
  • and, thus,
  • themselves
  • After + gerund (after是介词，后面加动名词(V-ing)，不是动词原形！)
  • , the
  • , and later,
  • they
  • can
  • , as
  • instead
  • Working (动名词)
  • , as well,
  • to become
  • due to
  • already
  • , namely,
  • having
  • , and as a result,


-- (4) Conclusion--



Standard IELTS essay phrase:
  • In conclusion, 总而言之

Vocabulary and Collocations:
  • enrolling in 进入；参加；注册
  • practical job skills 实际的工作技能
  • life-skills 生存技能
  • excursion 旅行；游玩；“在路上”

Words Showing Cohesion [Signposting words, conjunctions, relative pronouns] (C&C)
  • , taking
  • to
  • or
  • , giving
  • them
  • both
  • , which
  • their
  • ; however,
  • it
  • , as
  • they
  • , or
  • altogether



今天就分享到这里咯，咱们下期见！




【号外号外】


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  • 刚刚接触雅思，自己备考有困难，没有母语老师帮助你纠正改错的同学、

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