读后续写:蝴蝶结的故事(江苏南通二模 原创课件+学案 附全卷错题梳理)

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续写题目+续写设计+续写课件+续写学案+错题跟踪训练

基本情节：

我是一个重组家庭中的小女孩Kate，对继哥哥Henry总是存有偏见心怀戒备甚至极力排斥他。妈妈和继父非常努力地想让两个没有血缘关系的孩子情同手足。故事发生的当天我去参加舞台表演，上台后，却发现裙带系得很糟糕，后来松开了......

话题：家人关怀

主题：学会对家人、身边人的爱、关怀与尊重

文本特点：

本文选材贴近生活，对像Kate和Henry这样的孩子相处起来并不容易。重组家庭对于家长和孩子来说都是一个巨大的挑战，如何和睦相处彼此接纳是一个社会性的话题，本文经典再现了孩子们之间的嫌隙、父母双方的积极努力、与后来一方孩子的帮助打破了对方的偏见和隔阂。最终两家人变成一家人的故事，给大家带来很多思考。

设计理念：

首先抓住情节这条线，比较详细得分析故事发展的情节，推测续写情节内容。确保逻辑不出现问题；再者通过分析人物对话和动作及心理描写，来进行人物情感上的变化描写，通过句子的升级打磨达到高质量的续写水平；最后展示下水文和范文。

教学步骤：

1、明主题，不跑题。通过阅读全文弄明白人物之间的关系，故事情节发展的大方向。

2、理情节，不荒诞。通过详细的文本内容分段进行比较详细的人物对话、动作、心理描写等分析和合理的推断，确保故事情节的合理性。

3、真感情，不低级。用符合续写人物的心理、动作等的描写来刻画人物的情感，用贴切质朴的语言来传递人物之间的情感。

4、赏佳作，不奢华。通过打磨句子使续写层次提升。展示下水文和范文，让学生受益匪浅。与此同时认真揣摩原文续写风格，保持一致，形成闭环。切记用奢华的语言打破原文与续写内容的和谐。

具体亮点：

1、这节课在一定程度上提升了学生的人际交往能力和良好的同理心，从情节和情感方面给予学生们比较全面细致的指导。

2、打磨升级句子、展示教师现场作文、亮出范文让学生从多个角度去审视续写的深度和广度。

具体收获：

1、遇到同一类话题的文章有内容可写，有思路去构造，有深度去挖掘。

2、学生的思维品质和对人际交往能力有一定程度的提升。

原文：

I was in my room slowly getting ready to head to the community theater with the rest of my family. I wasn't in the mood for being onstage.

“Kate come here.” my mom called from down the hall.

I found my mom outside the bathroom, holding a wet book. Henry, my new stepbrother was nearby working on a complicated string knot, as usual.

My mother gave the book a shake. “Henry’s book is in the bathtub. Did you put it there?”

“Not on purpose,” I said. “it was already on the edge and it happened to fall in when I stepped out of the tub.”

My mother glared at me. Something she never did before I had a stepfamily. “You could have picked it up” she said. “That would have been the kind thing to do.”

As Henry walked ahead of ours to the car,my mom took me aside. “This is our corner of the world now, Kate.” she said. Let’s try to make it a good one.

The community theater was busy when we got there. Theatre used to be what my mom and I did together --- one play a year for our special thing. With Henry involved, it didn’t seem so special anymore.

Henry’s dad,who had arrived earlier to help set up, was already in costume. “Dear children, ” he called in a theatrics voice, “come to father.” I thought he was a nice guy even before he and my mother started dating. Unfortunately, I now had a stepbrother to deal with.

Soon, it was a curtain time I peaked out the audience and noticed that the darkened theater was full. My heart beat faster. I forgot my annoyance at Henry as he lead actress sang, “The hills are alive with the sound of music!” Nothing compared to show nights.

Before long, it was my turn. I went onstage, song book in hand. As we kids lined up before Henry’s dad, who was playing the part of our father, I realized how poorly I tied the string knot on my skirt which was over leggings. I should have asked mom for help.

And then, suddenly, the string knot on my skirt came untied.

I shot Henry a grateful glance. 

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